Ivaron's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[This girl I like..]

Wait, what? Was that Marten?

Did I just see Marten from Questionable Content in there? :O

JoelOnToast responds:

Complete coincidence, ahah.

[Awesome Force pt. 2]

Oh no what is that smell!

It smells like vomit, ehrg it's disgusting, I think I'm going to *vomits*
Lol! Loved that joke. Also how present-smello wanted to take over the world was hilarious.

FutureSmello responds:

You're the first person to quote that line correctly! ;P

Haha cheers. Present Smello is a bit of a maniac, but he's a douche maniac, so it's okay.

[All NG Fads Die!!! 5!!!]

YES!!

IT IS HERE!!!!!

Okay, time for me to quit writing in all caps. BUT IT'S HERE!!!!!!!!

*cough*

I loved it. There was less blood and gore in it as there was in the one's Logo did, but - I don't really miss it. The animation better than expected, and the graphics are just amazing in every. single. part. 10/10.

The style - well, it was AFD. 10/10.

Sound - hmm, well I'm not a big fan of the bands you used, except for Limp Bizkit. However - it just fits with AFD. So that should count for something. I also really enjoyed the editing in the music in your part, Radioactive. So, while I usually enjoy different music, I think this was perfect. 10/10.

The violence, well like I said it's not as bloody as the other AFD, but that doesn't mean it's not as violent! It was way more violent actually, especially when taking Helbereth's part and the Castlecrashers one into consideration. It was violence in style, that's what it is. 100/10.

Interactivity get's a 10 as well. The menu looked great, and it wasn't really missing anything. A scene selection wasn't there, but I didn't miss it one bit. I don't think it was needed, I like to watch it all in one piece anyway.

The humor - well that was good too. The Weebl and Bob, DoVG, Johnny Rocketfingers, Sprites, and SOAP parts were hilarious. So again a 10/10.

Overal: 1.00000000000/10. Sadly I can only vote 10 and can't hack :(

Oh and uhm,

IT'S HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

*cough* ;)

Radioactive24 responds:

;D

- Radioactive24

[Pencils episode 2]

Good idea, not so good execution =)

I liked it. It was a good idea, but the execution of that idea wasn't all that great. Still, it was good enough for me to enjoy it.
Anyway, here's some pointers I think you'll be interested in reading:

I see you have trouble with the music going on when the flash has stopped. Here's the solution: in flash, select the keyframe that holds the music. Then go to properties (below the stage), open it up. Then at the dropdown menu for "Sync:" select "stream". You may need to close the library/color mixer/etc window to be able to see the "sync" dropdown menu on properties, as it is a bit to the right.

When 'streamed', the music will be layed out over the frames that hold it. That means that when your movie ends, the music will stop. And also when you pause the movie the music will stop. And if you synch something to the movie (like lip-synching / talking), it will end up the same way on the internet like you view it on your computer. This is because on the internet, the movie is constantly loaded, and for slower movies some frames are skipped. When on 'event', like you have it now, the music isn't layed out over the frames but instead one big 'event', so while the frames get skipped, the music just plays normally. And then it gets 'out of synch'. When you set the music to 'stream', that doesn't happen because every frame skipped is a piece of music skipped (but it's in such small portions that you won't notice it, except for it not going 'out of synch').
The music will also take up less filesize when set to 'stream'.

So while the 'event' setting is okay for explosions and stuff that happens quickly, for music, voices, and long sound effects you'll need to set it to stream.

Okay, now on with the review: I too think you need to make it all longer, and use more FPF instead of just tweaning. It just looks better. Really good animators use 36 or higher. It may take some more work, but it will look much better, and it will hide the little mistakes in the drawings because it all changes too fast for the viewer to notice them. That is, if you FPF instead of tweaning ;)

Oh, and try to put more effort in the drawings themselves. Stick figures are okay if done well. Most of this looked good, but some of it looked like it didn't fit with the well-drawn stuff. It's as if you put more effort into the hands, than you put into the figures.
I know, that all takes more work, but it's worth it though; you'll definatly see the difference in the score for your movie.

The flash did seem to lack some substance.. At the start it looked like the two 'hands' were battling each other trough their drawings, but then the one hand drew a truck to kill his own dragon. That kinda threw me on a loop. Didn't seem to fit with the rest of the story.

With the truck, all you had to have the dragon was 'fuck', then the truck falls, doesn't hit him, he's like 'phew', then the truck sloooowly start wobbling in the dragons direction, with a 'creaking' sound (try flashkit [dot] com for sounds), dragon says 'oh shit' *BANG*. I think that would have been better, as the dialogue now is a bit weird, like THESLIGHTDISCOMFORT said.

Oh, and here's what you also need to do at the end: create a keyframe at the end that holds a screen in which you will put a replay button. Then select the keyframe, go to 'actions - frame', and add a "stop" action. Then add a button symbol and give it a 'playfromframe' action. This is all explained in 'OMFG: A Flash Tutorial', which you can find on NG. Use the search function ;)

If you really want to end up like Adam Philips (Brackenwood) and James Farr (Xombie), then put more effort into it. And practice! It may seem boring to take alot of time on your flash, but it's the only way =)

nijnemans responds:

ty you

my savior

[Pulp Fiction Interactive]

Good

Nicely done, I liked how you said "starring" and then my name came up.

BUT, Pulp Fiction is an old (but awesome) movie, so why are doing this? Is it a school project or something?

Anyways, I caught something you must have missed: at the credits, the button symbol for "drawings".
I assume you had originally called that "drawings/animations", then had to move it to the right where "animations" didn't fit on screen anymore so you changed it to just "drawings".

Well, I don't think alot of people will notice this (I did accidently), but you apparently left the "on hit" part of the "drawings" button to "drawings/animations", so when you click it that comes up.

Woo, long explanation for something that simple ^^

(ps: sound is 4 because I don't like either of those songs)

metallica41 responds:

Yes, this is a project at school for multimedia. I found out about the drawings/animation bug after i got to school today, i'll fix it when I get home. Thanks for the review. Glad you liked it.

[Tribute to a fallen Hero]

Very nice.

I think Steve was pretty much an idiot, but that doesn't mean I won't say I feel sad that he's dead. I always liked to watch his shows, not because it's really important to spend so much time saving animals when there's human lives you could be saving, but because the shows were always brilliantly funny.

So it's a shame to see him go. And that's probably indeed what his heaven would look like. Did I catch him saying 'crikey', btw, or was that something else?

Xeptic responds:

Yes that was supposed to be crickey. We didn't want to mimic his voice because that would probably ruin the atmosphere of the animation. I don't have any experience with lip-syncing, so that's why it looks a little strange. Thanks for the review.

[Revenge on AFD]

Haha, nice ending

I liked the ending. That shows this was just a joke and not ment to offend anyone. Nice going.

I think FetusEater covered most of what there is to improve. I'll also say one thing that bugged me, though: the moon and stars have the same color as the rope, which made it kinda weird.

Oh, and also, you should make the moon actually 'shine' instead of it being a static image. Doing what FetusEater said (with a movieclip) is a good idea, but also give it a static shine, which is easily accomplished by copying it, pasting in a layer on top of it, then selecting and setting alpha level (in the color mixer, to the right of the stage) to a lower level. Then hit ctrl+alt+S and make it larger. Do this a few times on different layers, with the color gradually becoming more invisable and larger, until it looks good. Do the same (but to a lesser extent) for the stars.

Good luck! I'm going to give you a 5 since this will obviously pass, and because it's a not-so-anti-AFD movie, and I was in AFD4 kickin' Xombie arse! ;)

Oh by the way, picking something like the theme from Mission: Impossible or something like that would have made more sence than that song from Blackeyed Peas. Also, I really hate that song, it's on the radio way too much driving me insane :p

BrassKnucklesClock responds:

lol yer your right :P, chrz for the review mate n thanks for the tips

[Animated Book]

Hmm..

Alright, first off, I think the whole story and idea behind it are great.

But, don't get me wrong here, it's just boring the way you told it. The story on itself: superb. The way it's told: bad.
Let me explain what's wrong:
- grammar and spelling mistakes
- way too long, too many repeats of the same thing. I continuely had the feeling that things you used 4 or more sentances for could be described in 1 short sentance.
- the plot could be seen coming from a mile away. I think it would be more of a tear-jerker if you could make it so one doesn't expect the sad ending.
- You tried to use too much emotion on the character. I think, to me atleast, it would 'feel' sadder if that part was left to the imagination of the 'reader'/viewer.

I liked the book, especially when flipping the pages, very much. Did you draw that or did you use AS? About those buttons with MC's in them you placed all over the place: it's a very good idea, and most of them were great, but some were just a tad... childish. Like the ambulance sound, and the falling tears. That kinda ruined the 'sad' mood.

Alot of whining here, but that's only because this has alot of potential and I'd hate to see that not being used as well as it could be.

Good luck on your next animated book/animation!

COUNTYGATES responds:

Well I'm glad you liked the whole story and the idea behind it and yes, I'm aware of all the grammar and spelling mistakes and it was probably a bit silly of me to not proof read it before making the book, but i put it together at like 4am or something like that so I just didn't have the energy to do it, lol. Admittedly, I am not a very good story writer because it's just not what I do, I guess I'm just more of a thinker. I actually never read either, I think I've read like 1 book in my life apart from the ones forced upon me by the education system so that is probably another reason why I'm not too good. But thanks for the tips, it's good to get some constructive critism from a writer.

Well the flipping pages is essentially just gradient shapes I drew in flash and then shape tweened. It's very easy and the gradient I thought was just a nice effect. Yeah, my teacher did complain about the ambulance sound and christmas music, I guess I was just trying to add (uneccessary) variation, because I know how the story is quite slow paced and some people will probably get bored of it.

Well I will try work on my story telling if I do decide to write another story, because I do have a couple more ideas.

Thanks for the review

[ICHHLT - Star wars]

Darth Geranimo!!

Rofl, that was great dude, keep it up!

MarkArandjus responds:

Thanks, will! :)